coordinated with the activity check for the first time ever

[realitymods]

How's my driving?

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That said, please don't post here if you don't feel able to handle constructive criticism. A well thought-out, helpful critique can be a wonderful thing and shows that people care. When you're critiquing others, try to be specific about what works and what doesn't, as that can be very useful for pinpointing what a player should keep and what a player should let go.

Commence!

Comments

[onehundredbeers]

Ray Carling - gotitwrong
Nathan Explosion - onehundredbeers

[semantics]

Ray's a douche therefore A+ (also, Meredith really likes him but that's just not important)

FOR NATHAN. We've talked about him a lot, but I really enjoy the way his complexity comes out in a really... interesting way? Like, there are a lot of interesting contradictions and they all seem completely natural. I also really appreciate how you do his speech patterns.

And now you have me watching Metalocalypse, of all things, which rather proves the point.

[maturelildevil.livejournal.com]

Hey, I meant to tell you this the last time the HMD rolled around, but I've really loved what you've done with Ray. You give him a lot of depth that we didn't always get in LoM. Gosh, I adore him.

And you're making me want to watch Metalocalypse so I can see more of Nathan. Sadly, I've only seen tiny bits of it during Venture Brothers >.>;

[shobogan.livejournal.com]

ME LIKING RAY IS ALL YOUR FAULT. :p I mean, he is still a douche, but he is a douche I care about.

And Nathan! You've really got his speech down, and he is hilarious and oddly endearing and, ahem, fucking awesome.

[semantics]

✘ ♛ ♰ ⊕ ♄

Sebastian Flyte Ootori Kyouya Hiwatari Satoshi Braxiatel Jade Curtiss

fruitbrandy hostclubmommy incommand collectionist fonicartestry

{private concrit} {private concrit} {private concrit} {private concrit} {private concrit}

Crit on Jade is especially wanted! He is new, and annoying, and difficult, and weird. But mostly difficult. Pointing out things being done wrong with any of them is helpful, but with Jade it is especially so. Because he is silly and he smells bad.

[quecaneatit.livejournal.com]

Jade always smells bad. It adds to his uncute aura.

[thrall]

ASCH ► Tales of the Abyss (d1) ► promisedsomeone
AXEL ► Kingdom Hearts (d4) ► smolderingdark
DAISUKE ► D•N•Angel (d1) ► insynch
EMIL ► Tales of Symphonia (d2) ► pactum
SIRKKA ► FreakAngels (d1) ► newworldlover

Each has personal concrit floating at the top of their journal or linked in their profile. I've been slipping a little lately with my new muses and that's mostly stress, but still, if there's something IMMENSELY WRONG please tell me so I can correct it. Also I dropped Ikki because I can't get his muse back after this crap. Sorry.

/bites fingernails

[melissa-228.livejournal.com]

I will get around to actual concrit later tonight or tomorrow probably, but stalking Asch and Luke's thread I saw this and laughed:

[This is indeed very awkward, and Luke doesn't help when he's just ... NICE. Asch doesn't know how to respond to nice. It makes him freeze up like Windows ME]

So I just wanted to say I love you ♥

[astronomia]

Chris Skelton ☇ knowswheregodis
Argentine ☇ artiscordis
Luke fon Fabre ☇ royallybitching
Sherlock Holmes ☇ rationalist
Antimony Carver ☇ neverindanger

&

Fujioka Haruhi ☇ virginaesthetic
Merlin ☇ behindhiswords


The last two I'm sort of considering maybe dropping for a bit because I am failing hardcore with them and losing them and yes. But! Feedback would be lovely please. Especially on Luke and Sherlock? I'm nervous about them.

[promisedsomeone.livejournal.com]

I don't know Sherlock's canon so I can't help there, but LUKE.

Oh, Luke.

Luke is marvelous. I mean, he's long-haired bratty everyone hates him for the first ten hours of the game Luke. But he's also wants the best for the world so that he can be useful and help people Luke. So I feel bad when Asch is Asch, but I am also like EEEEEEEE because in some ways the game didn't do him justice. I mean, yeah, he's a jerkass with a heart of gold, we know that, but only Ion seems to see it. And here in RS it's like finally getting the chance to do so. I am really enjoying the threads I have with him, especially the one with Daisuke, because it's easier to interpret the 'real' Luke when he's not surrounded by trigger people, and you're doing wonderfully.

I really suck at crit, like, I can't even find anything nitpicky, so I'm just gonna end it here. /ffffff

[oliverplus]

Oliver Day | oliverplus

Oliver has been going through a lot of crazy stuff lately, so I'm definitely interested in whether or not his reactions/development have been realistic.

[bonnypiperlad]

I haven't had a chance to read everything with Oliver and the wonderfully crazy stuff that's been going on, but I haven't seen anything amiss. I think you're doing an excellent job, actually, at keeping Oliver's reactions to it very Oliver-like while still letting things affect him.

[maturelildevil.livejournal.com]

Hitachiin Kaoru - maturelildevil
The Tenth Doctor (d6) - bit_impossible
Donna Noble - forever_noble

So, yeah, I dropped Straxus... And it's been interesting with Ten's choice recently and playing with lines (and sometimes crossing them? Hmm.)

[oliverplus]

TEN.

That is all I have to say.

Also, Oliver insists that Donna needs to quit getting details of his personal life out of him. She's too persistent!

[melissa-228.livejournal.com]

Suou Tamaki || hostclubdaddy || Ouran Host Club || private concrit (http://hostclubdaddy.livejournal.com/1376.html)
Rose Tyler || shewalks_away || Doctor Who || private concrit (http://shewalks-away.livejournal.com/3176.html)
Charles Ryder || suchatourist || Brideshead Revisited || private concrit (http://suchatourist.livejournal.com/1362.html)
Arthur Pendragon || destinedking || Merlin || private concrit (http://destinedking.livejournal.com/1247.html)
Bernice Summerfield || brandyhabit || Doctor Who || private concrit (http://brandyhabit.livejournal.com/710.html)
Kuronuma Sawako || superoptimistic || Kimi ni Todoke || private concrit (http://superoptimistic.livejournal.com/736.html)

[semantics]

Even worse-smelling than a rappig.

[millenia]

Mm.

Kuhn ► silenteden
Marta ► formervanguard
Naminé ► breathenothing
Private concrits available at the top of their respective journals

I know I've been slacking on tags. Regardless, hit me with your best shot. This goes for crit on me as well, if you think there's something that I need to fix as a player that isn't necessarily related to my characters.

Hit me with it, I can take it, and lately I've been feeling like there's something wrong. So if someone else knows what it is, that'd be good to hear. Or I could be crazy. ♥

[pactum.livejournal.com]

I think Marta needs to take her clothes off.

[unto-death.livejournal.com]

Botta - unto_death

I'm still sort of getting back on my feet with him, and occasionally I am bad at keeping up with tags because of my goldfish memory, but please let me know if there's anything awful that bugs you? I'll do my best to fix it early on rather than let it get worse.

[shobogan.livejournal.com]

I don't know Botta's canon, but I think he's adorable? In a macho way, obvs.

(I see we're both afflicted with goldfish memory. /hi5!)

[kuribohcoast.livejournal.com]

Mu @ lamb_of_gold

and

Isaac @ grand_gaia

I feel like I've been really shaky with them both, Mu especially. plz to confirm/deny/punch in the face.

They've both got personal Concrit somewhere in their journals if you'd prefer that.


/crawls under cover

[semantics]

With Mu and Jade, I've found it easier, since they seem to have a weird provocation of each other going on there. Actually, it's something of a delight for me, because I've never seen quite this side of Mu.

One problem I've had with Isaac is that sometimes, there doesn't seem much to go off of in a response to him. And I suspect this may in part be because you're feeling shaky, so it's hard to get a response out of it. Have you considered trying to push through that and just give longer tags? Elaborate more, let the muses blurt out more? I know that sometimes when I'm having trouble with one, forcing them to actually speak more than I might want to kicks the voice and personality back into gear.

[helical.livejournal.com]

Omega | cosmic_engineer
Narvin | practicalrobes

[semantics]

Narvin can die in a fire. And doesn't that just say everything? Except it doesn't which is perhaps one thing I wanted to applaud in particular: Narvin continues to surprise. I relistened to 2.1 and 2.3 the other nights, and one thing in particular I noticed was that Narvin continued to be on his own side, not precisely playing his own game (he let Darkel use him a little, but he's one of the few who doesn't actually seem to be trying to manipulate everyone; he's more like a gadfly, really) but continuously not merely independent but his own force. And I think you do very well with that even in this setting; relistening, some of the things your Narvin has done/said resonated with what I was hearing.

For Omega I actually have something that may be helpful: I was skimming through Paradisa, as you do, and looking at some of Omega's old threads, and I noticed that you seemed to play with the switching between Omega and Five thing more then? Perhaps one thing to consider doing is exploring that more. Omega is a very unstable person - I recall you making a point of that in his five-things meme - so it might help if you explore this, which is something that is a sort of cataclysm of conflicting things? I suggest this mainly because I know you've been having issues getting him up to things lately.

[whitelighter]

ღ ⇒ ♕

Roxas [d4] Sefton Lowell HMD post

sunkenlight polarisation over here

[melissa-228.livejournal.com]

Looking at Sefton's abilities I've always noted that it says that his polarization allows for both attraction and repulsion. I think it would be cool to see the repulsion effect explored more, just because it would be interesting to see both Sefton and the other character have to deal with the effected character going from wanting to be Sefton's bff in one thread to feeling a bizarre aversion to him in the next.

I know for me, it would be super interesting for a character like Tamaki, since I really don't get the chance to have him dislike someone IC (unless they have the audacity to hit on Haruhi *coughAxelcough*) that often, so to deal with him feeling the repulsion effects of Sefton's polarization would be really fun to play out.

Beyond all that, it's been interesting watching Sefton have to deal with his trials in the real world back on the Plane with his time in the hospital and all that. It's nice to see how you use what's going on with him in his reality and integrate it into his "life" on the Plane and his interactions with other characters. I'm looking forward to seeing more of it in the future!

[nodoff.livejournal.com]

☇ Romanadvoratrelundar tastefulfashion {HMD (http://tastefulfashion.livejournal.com/53866.html)}
☇ Haibara Ai asmallamoroso {HMD (http://asmallamoroso.livejournal.com/2431.html)}

THIS IS RATHER POINTLESS OF ME TO POST TO BUT I LIKE JUMPING THE BANDWAGON.

[bonnypiperlad]

Jamie McCrimmon || bonnypiperlad

Private HMD also at the top of the journal, if you prefer.

[oliverplus]

I love your Jamie. I think I've said it before, but I think you do a fantastic job of capturing his voice in your style of writing--whatwith och and everything else he says. I can hear him really well!

You also have a fantastic grasp of his personality. I totally giggled when you mentioned...in an ooc comment on a plot post somewhere. I don't remember exactly, but you talked about Jamie's danger sense, and it just all fits so well! Even little things, like I saw your recent thread with Jamie and Ten, and I about died when Ten tried to distract the zombies, and Jamie just kept fighting them until Ten yelled at him to run. It's such a Jamie thing to do!

So, I think you're doing a fantastic job, and I look forward to having more Jamie and Oliver fun!

[buckingbronco.livejournal.com]

Shun - shunofandromeda
Dino - buckingbronco
Shion - ram_of_gold
Firesong - flawless_genius

[reverseptsd.livejournal.com]

John Watson - reverseptsd

[semantics]

1) It's so lovely to have you back.

2) I think you're doing well with John! One thing in particular, aside from his voice, that I appreciated was watching him dealing with Sherlock's little gaps in knowledge. I also think it's been great to have him here during a plot that really plays up to his abilities.

[anoblesavage.livejournal.com]

Leela of the Sevateem [anoblesavage]

[astronomia]

I really want you to know that I'm enjoying Leela and Sherlock's interactions. They surprised me but it's really fun. And it helps that your Leela is perfect. I'm really terribly fond of her and it makes me happy to have her around. I have no good crit but I just wanted you to know that.

[shobogan.livejournal.com]

Fifth Doctor (Doctor Who d2) miseardae
Remus Lupin (Harry Potter d3) oncemarauder
Kate Lockley (Angel d2) borntostand
Barbara Gordon (DC d1) bodilesswarrior

[poshmouthytart.livejournal.com]

Both Barbara and Kate are absolute joys!

I really love the dynamic that Irene and Barbara are already developing and I hope it continues on because they seem to mesh really well.

Kate is just... Well, I'm bias, because she is one of my favourite Angel characters, and I can hear her voice in my head when I read your tags. If that isn't doing it right, what is? :)

I know this isn't really critty but I wanted to let you know how much I'm enjoying tagging with them both.

[boxtheotaku.livejournal.com]

Box - [Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]

[semantics]

I love Box! I think he's amazing and adorable. I also think that you do really well with the depth of him - I've been keeping an eye on some of the threads, and you did so well coming out with that stuff. So I just wanted to say I'm enjoying threads with him muchly.

[tomysister.livejournal.com]

Reiko - tomysister
Tear - youidiots

Ahaha. Personal issues making me drop all my tags for like the past week aside, let me know.

[alien-catcher.livejournal.com]

Alex Drake (d1) | poshmouthytart | {Private Crit (http://poshmouthytart.livejournal.com/2758.html)}
Gwen Cooper (d1) } alien_catcher | (Private Crit (http://alien-catcher.livejournal.com/30041.html))
Irene Adler (d1) | thewomanswit | (Private Crit (http://thewomanswit.livejournal.com/2923.html))

[tsunderes.livejournal.com]

I have been quite busy with school, and this isn't ending in the foreseeable future, so sorry for any threads I've dropped. If you have your heart set on finishing something, let me know and I'll get to it once life calms down. Which might be in December. But I will get to it.

[poshmouthytart.livejournal.com]

Alex looks forward to having Diva back, as much as I look forward to having you back.

I hope school gives you a break soon. *hugs*