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It really is! Inflicting physical harm on Narvin is a blast -- why else would the universe indulge in it so often?

Pandora is going to be sorely disappointed when Narvin doesn't do what she wants. He's contrary like that.

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Irving will do a happy dance. ...okay, no, he'll probably throw out a quip of some sort because this is Brax and Narvin we're talking about, and no one ever shows Narvin any signs of gratitude, appreciation, or approval. But I'm sure Braxiatel can manage to sneer out something about Narvin offering them a rare demonstration of intelligence and foresight, which is almost appreciation. Sort of.

Seriously, if he cared at all what they thought of him, he'd be more than a bit put out about the lack of gratitude. Leela figures out going behind Darkel's guards is a good idea, and she's the greatest thing since sliced bread. He manages to rig a barrier between them and the guards using nothing more than Matrix access and a single terminal, and he gets no thanks whatsoever.

...okay, so maybe he is a little bitter.

Every time I relisten, I realize more and more how horrifically underappreciated poor Narvin is. New themesong for Narvin.

One day he's just going to sit back and let everyone else try and figure out how to protect themselves. It'll be funny!

He says this, but he is about as capable of quitting his job as Brax is of quitting his.

Of course! But really, how hard is it to give him a non-snarky thank you once in a decade or two?

Experiment idea: no one is allowed to insult Narvin.

And then the universe blows up.

Aha, yes. But he's used to insults! You know, if Brax really wants to throw Narvin, all he has to do is give him a (sincere-sounding) compliment, and he'll be completely at sea.

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As that requires 1) sincerity, 2) directness, and 3) complimenting, I suspect that, should Brax try, he would choke on his own words and die on the spot.

Well, it doesn't need to be actual sincerity! Narvin would be astonished just by the idea of a compliment, pretend or not. ~~Poor guy.~~

...OH MY GOD THAT IS SO PATHETIC.

I think someone needs a hug.

It reeeally is. But then, coming from Brax and their running animosity, a compliment really would be something unusual. And slightly frightening.

In some dark, secret place very, very deep inside him, an eight-year-old Narvin really wants a hug. Possibly from Benny, because she was nice to him.

rdutyuhilyktytjdrtfghj ~~don't move in on Brax's girl~~ THAT IS SO CUTE and metaly he will never live it down.

Oh man, now I want to make that an experiment after the plot's done. Itty-bitty Narvin! ~~Jealous of an eight year old, Irving?~~ And he will have Convenient Amnesia when he's grown back up.

~~if he says yes, is it justifiable homicide?~~ Very Convenient Amnesia that Braxiatel will never believe.

Don't think he won't holorecord it.

~~No, Irving. Killing eight year olds is bad. Even if they do grow up to be irritating Coordinators.~~

That's blackmail, Brax!

~~what about using eight-year-olds to kill other people?~~

No, it's part of his mandate: to preserve the past and in doing so safeguard the future.

~~That's bad too, especially when they're your best friend's son.~~

Narvin promises to find his way back on Brax's Collection to destroy that holo.

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THAT IS SO ADORABLE! Benny might have to give him a hug now just to wind him up, because it's fun to do that to Time Lords.

He will lineface at her. :| Unless I turn him eight as an experiment, and then she might become his new best friend.

Awwwwwww! Well she thought eight year old Narvin was super adorable! They can totally be bffs. And then when he's a grown up again she'll torture him mercilessly about everything and anything he does in eight year old form.

Between Benny and Brax, he'll never have a shred of dignity again, will he?

Dignity is overrated. And seriously, out of all of the Expanded Universe characters, do any of them have a shred of dignity left?

This is true! But Narvin likes to pretend he has it. ~~And he says please don't embarrass him in front of his President, Bernice. He'll never recover.~~

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